Eye See You (flash-in-the-pan horror)
Guy Metrey put the dismembered remains of his neighbor into the walk-in freezer. All except the head. He was going to take that and have it mounted, yup. He wanted a souvenir of the hunt. He closed the door and brought the head to his trunk, where he carefully began wrapping it in wax paper to put it into the ice-filled cooler.
The eyes on his former neighbor's head stared accusingly at him as he wrapped it. He bent down to whisper, "Icy you," into the lifeless ear. But as the ax fell to cut off his own head from an unseen enemy, he heard a maniacal cackle behind and to the left of him.
Felled in his prime by someone who wanted to get a head in life...
The eyes on his former neighbor's head stared accusingly at him as he wrapped it. He bent down to whisper, "Icy you," into the lifeless ear. But as the ax fell to cut off his own head from an unseen enemy, he heard a maniacal cackle behind and to the left of him.
Felled in his prime by someone who wanted to get a head in life...
posted by Liz | 8:26 AM
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Creative Writing / Writer / Writers #1. Review Of "I SEE YOU" (nw) [Rated: XGC]Writers / Writer / Creative Writing
Review By: Robin -
Review's Rating: 4.0
Review Length: 336 Characters
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Even though I don't read horror much, I can tell I'm gonna like your port. I've added you to my favorites.
I like the title, brief description and genre selection - a big thing with me.
Are there links available for us to view your published works?
Robin
#2. Review Of "I SEE YOU" (nw)
By: Shadowmancer
Review Time: 01-12-05 @ 5:43pm
Review's Rating: 4.5
Pretty disturbing, but I like it a lot. The whole thing makes me think of a corrupt world where killing is a normal thing to do (almost making us like...animals?). Well the only correction I have to make is that you wrote "Icy you" I think it would read better if you wrote "I see you". Also, would you mind telling me (you don't need to write it in the story) who the Guy is killed by, and if my corrupt world assumption is correct? Well, thanks for the great read and WRITE ON!!!
Regards,
Shadowmancer
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